力闻【雅思作文批改】5.5分：需多积累一些倍数句式-考雅吧
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【雅思作文批改】5.5分：需多积累一些倍数句式-考雅吧变身情缘
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作文题目：
The pie charts show the proportions of different types of books sold by a book shop in 1972,力闻 1992 and 2012.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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作文内容：
The pie chart shows[b1] how the sales of five various types of books in the book shop changed in three different years.
The proportion of adults fiction[b2] was one fifth in 1972全蚀狂爱, however, it soared at the highest in 2012斯道拉恩索, at nearly a half. Also我从雪山来 , children fiction accounted for the same percentage (20%) in 1972, and kept a continuous increasing sale until 2012 year (at 25%).
In contrast悟空外传, the figure for travel books sold in the shop declined from 15% (in 1972) to 10% (2012)野牛冲锋枪 , although it rose to 20% in 1992. And the biographies preferred by costumers occupied 20% in 1972一品贵女 ,蒋多多 but after that, only 5% of the books sold in this book store waswerebiographies in 1992. And for others, the percentage of their sales appeared a dropping trend, from one quarter in 1972 to only a little more than ten percent in 2012.
Overall, fictions become[b3] increasingly popular with time goes on米赚电脑版, either for adults or for children, while the figure for other non-fiction books decreased.
[b1]应该是charts show
[b2]成人小说是adult fiction[b2]
[b3]became
各项细评：
针对问题最大的一点给出修改建议：
文章最大的问题是缺少比较中的倍数表达式，可以积累一些这样的句式，在考试中灵活运用都市邪修 。
附批改原图：
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（每1个数字对应一份资料欧利萨斯，如资料获取过程有任何问题蔡明的胸，可在后台给小侃留言哦~）
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